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KayLi Rising: Preface and Chapter One


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KayLi Rising is the latest novel that I've been working on. I'll share the preface and first chapter here, and if it gets interest, I might share more.Β πŸ™‚Β Please tell me what you think, I'd love your feedback!

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KayLi Rising

PREFACE

Kayla hates my pet bird. That's how we met, actually, Kayla and I. It was the bird's fault. Or maybe it was mine.Β 

Either way, Kayla and I met last winter, and when we did, we didn't know what was in store for us, Kayla and I. How could we have known? We just knew that our lives would never be the same again.Β 

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CHAPTER ONE

Kayla and I are two sides of a coin, and I like to think of myself as tails. I'm younger, shorter, quieter, plainer, and never the center of attention. But you can't have heads without tails. Tails, you could even say, is the driving force behind heads.

Kayla would be heads, if we were a coin. She's bolder, braver, more outgoing. Kayla's excitable, the kind of girl everyone wants to be around. Kayla's smart, pretty, and athletic. Kayla's been voted Second Most Popular three years in a row. Kayla is secretary of student council, and Bryce Morgan, voted Most Popular, has an all-too-obvious crush on her.Β 

Look, I'm not saying this out of jealousy, or because I want any pity. I don't. I'm not saying Kayla's better than me, or that I put Kayla on a pedestal, or that I'm insecure. I like myself the way I am. I'm just telling you about Kayla. If I were to tell you about me? Well, I wouldn't. I'd let Kayla handle that. I don't talk about myself.

What do I talk about? I don't. Don't talk, that is. I leave talking to Kayla.

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This is great! I'm writing something too but it isn't ready to be read whatsoever. Keep writing! I'd love to see more. I'm already interested, love the coin comparison. It's all very good :)

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1 hour ago, MySchoolLesbianZ said:

This is great! I'm writing something too but it isn't ready to be read whatsoever. Keep writing! I'd love to see more. I'm already interested, love the coin comparison. It's all very good :)

Thank you!! 😁 I'm glad you like it. I will share more tomorrow, I think. You should also keep writing! Even if you don't want to share your work, someday it will get to the point where it is ready to be read! When that time comes, I'd love to see it. Have a nice day! 😁

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You too! I will definitely keep writing. It's my dream, but sometimes I loose my hope of completing anything I write. I'm planning to write some today and maybe I'll share it with you soon :)

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I hope it's okay if I leave a few suggestions. Respectfully:

1. You could cut "Don't talk, that is," from the end, because I think it would sound better and you don't need to say it.

2. "I'm not saying Kayla's better than me, or that I put Kayla on a pedestal, or that I'm insecure." In that sentence, you could take away the first "or", the one between "better than me" and "that I put Kayla on a pedestal."

I think that's it. You don't have to implement that, it's just my two cents. Also I've been writing like I said I would and I think I'm ready to share the beginning tomorrow. It's pretty long, so I'll send it in pieces, but I have chapter one finished and I'm halfway into chapter two.

Also, I'm excited to read the next part when it's written :)

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