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The Story I promised you all.


TheOriginalAxel

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Well, Here it is at last The story that I promised everyone.

Chapter 1: The big news.

Abandoned          

“What! Why are you only just telling me this now? Why now after all these years?” I had so many questions. 

I am in the front room with my parents because they said that there is something I need to know. “Sit down please love” my mum asks, but I can’t, I’m too nervous, I can’t help but think; “what if they are kicking me out?Are either of them seriously ill? Is that why they want to talk to me? To tell me that one of them doesn’t have long left to live? “Please just sit down, just take a seat while we tell you what we have to.” “Oh Lord, here we go” I think to myself. “We aren’t your real parents.,” my dad says, not meeting my gaze, instead staring at the floor. “We wanted to tell you sooner, but we weren’t sure how you would handle this news,” he says. My eyes widen, “we aren’t your real parents” bounces around my head like a tennis ball. “But... I have lived with you for so long … what happened for me to be here?” I ask, both curious and confused, how could they not be my parents, they have raised me for the last 16 years. “Axel, love, the reason you ended up with us is because...” my “mum” says but doesn’t finish. “Because what? Please tell me because I need to know what happened,” I say, she continues, “... well, when you were around 6 weeks old, your mother abandoned you on the hospital doorstep and never came back for you, so you were put up for adoption and we took you in because we were unable to have children of our own,” she tells me. “Abandoned,” I say, a little shocked, “why did she abandon me? Couldn’t she look after me?” I ask. “We don’t know why she abandoned you, we were only told what we just told you,” my “dad” says. 

“I want to find her.” I tell them, “At least then if I do find her, I can find out why she abandoned me and understand this better,” I say, “What was her name?” I ask. Her name is Nattalie Howlett. Do you think you will be able to find her?” my adoptive mother asks. “I hope I can find her, because then I can put my mind at rest, knowing why she abandoned me.” I say, my cheeks become waterfalls, “Thank you for looking after me all these years, you have been like a real family to me, I will never forget you.” I manage to eventually say, relieved that now I can search for my mother. 

The End of chapter 1.

Please don't judge my story making skills.

Can someone please help me brainstorm ideas for the rest of the story because I don't want it to end just here.

 

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39 minutes ago, Elated Homoromantic said:

Hey @Chabela, here is the story I told you about.

oh my-

this is SO GOOD!!!!!!!! I absolutely love this!!!!! I can't wait for a new part, if you do make one!

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HMmmmMmm maybe they move because the main character looks in the hospital and tells some things about the mother (23, her hobbies, last place on record seen) and the place she was last seen supposedly was the main character wants to go there to see if she's still there (could be any city you want) and then the main characters adopted parents said something like "okay we're going to help you out with finding your birth mother but you still have to stay in school" and so he agrees and then one day he bumps into a girl with dark brown hair with some blue dye in it, 4'11 and has glasses (prescription or not prescription, don't matter) they like each other for a few months and date and start talking about their life and they both find out that she's also adopted and then leave it as a cliff hanger until the next chapters.

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8 hours ago, Chabela said:

HMmmmMmm maybe they move because the main character looks in the hospital and tells some things about the mother (23, her hobbies, last place on record seen) and the place she was last seen supposedly was the main character wants to go there to see if she's still there (could be any city you want) and then the main characters adopted parents said something like "okay we're going to help you out with finding your birth mother but you still have to stay in school" and so he agrees and then one day he bumps into a girl with dark brown hair with some blue dye in it, 4'11 and has glasses (prescription or not prescription, don't matter) they like each other for a few months and date and start talking about their life and they both find out that she's also adopted and then leave it as a cliff hanger until the next chapters.

the thing is, my main character is based on someone real (me) and my main character is gay, so I will take your idea of him bumping into a girl and make him bump into a guy.

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Hey @Chabela, what do you think of this for a start on the next chapter?

 

“Is that everything loaded into the van?” my adoptive mother asks. 

“I believe so, let me just double check every room really quick.” I reply. 

It is moving day, at long last. We are finally selling up and getting a bigger house because the 3-bedroom house we currently live in is too small for a growing teen such as myself. 

“I’ll meet you there, I just want to go to and say goodbye to some of my friends first.” I tell him. 

“Ok, if, you’re sure. Do you know the way?” My adoptive father asks. 

“Yes dad, of course I know where it is, I mean, I go past it every day on the way to school” I tell him. 

 

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Well I am afraid you are a bit late to aid me with chapter 2 but I am currently stuck on Chapter 3. This is all I have for chapter 3 so far:

 

Abandoned 

“So, where are you going to search for her first?” My adoptive mother asks. 

“Well, I was planning on going to the hospital to see if they can tell me a bit more about my birth mother” I say, really excited about the fact that at long last, I will finally be able to find my birth mother. 

*** 

“Do you know what her name is?” asked the doctor. 

“Yes, her name is Nattalie Howlett.” I reply, hoping that they have her on record. 

“Ah, yes, here she is, she is 37 years old, 5’ 5” and has 6 other children” the doctor tells me. 

I have siblings! Are they all boys? Are they all girls? Are there more boys than girls? Are there more girls than boys? 

“Thank you, this information is really helpful for me.” I say. 

“You are most welcome young man. I hope you can find her.” The doctor replied. 

*** 

“Is that her?” I asked my adoptive parents, unsure whether I had found my birth mother or not.

 

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